Trying out the Cascade poem as originated by Udit Bhatia.
Unmasked
I hadn’t seen you standing there.
Replay the last five minutes
What could you have seen?
My armor’s forgotten in the corner
* * *
Your eyes pierce right through me and I
feel fresh wounds pool with blood. I’m
oozing shame. If only
I hadn’t seen you standing there.
* * *
You do not look away or smirk
at my full exposure. No
scornful gaze as you
replay the last five minutes.
* * *
I thought I was a star at day
There, but invisible to
all — not enough shine.
What could you have seen?
* * *
Gravitational pull shrinks space
Suddenly you’re here with me
Your arms wrap my waist
My armor’s forgotten in the corner.
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A beautiful poem….just love the imagery of your words.
Thank you so much! I enjoyed writing it. 🙂
very lovely poem… armor forgotten in the corner…I loved this. Heartspell
I cant quite figure out where you’re coming from in this poem but I enjoyed reading your ability to write a poem…Nice one…Cheers!!!
“My armor’s forgotten in the corner. ” That’s a great line! Nice wrting!
really a beautiful poem…sometimes letting the armor lay is not a bad thing…
Very beautiful poem indeed…will be back for more:)
one thing about me is that i always forgot and leave my armour behind- if you see me closely, i have more wounds to display than the man up on the cross!
wise words,
beautiful emotions!
Thank you all so much for your kind words! I look forward to reading your own work!
Your words are so powerful…i enjoyed your poem very much.
cool poem:]
Very nice. How does the Cascade form work? I liked it and I’d like to know more about it. Thanks.
Thank you! The Cascade is pretty free-form — it only has one rule. Check out this link for the best explanation. Happy writing! http://blog.writersdigest.com/poeticasides/2010/06/03/PoeticFormCascadePoem.aspx
Thanks for the link. I think I’ll try it out.
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Thank you in advance…
everyone needs encouragement…
Happy Friday!
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I have sent this to every poet in my list.
nice words!! “Your eyes pierce right through me and I feel fresh wounds pool with blood. I’m oozing shame.” I like it!
i love the poem…d last few lines are amazing:)
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Thank you so much!